|For representational purpose only|
“Look, mister, I can do more than that for ten grand. You want it kinky?”
Her voice was as phoney as mine. Maybe she was married too.
“Just your clothes.”
“Well, if that’s all you want, mister,” she shrugged and dropped her bra and tights.
“Now turn around slowly.”
I tipped my hat low over my face. I could see in the light of the moon that she’d a body to die for. Next minute I went into
rigor mortis—I was staring at my naked wife.
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Good one. Reminds me of the scene in the movie True Lies where Jamie Lee Curtis is conned by her husband Arnold Schwarzenegger to go to a hotel to carry out a secret mission...ReplyDelete
Thanks, Unknown! I recalled the scene from TRUE LIES soon after I put up the short. I enjoyed the film. Schwarzenegger was a fine entertainer in his earlier films.Delete
Surprise, honey, I'm home! :) Good one!ReplyDelete
Thanks, Charles. Maybe I ought to compile a book of drabbles someday!Delete
The fun some people have when they're at home and think nobody is looking!ReplyDelete
Hi Sergio! Actually, this takes place in an alley but I couldn't factor that in because I ran out of words. Both husband and wife lead secret lives.Delete
Nice work, Prashant. I like the O. Henry-type twist at the end.ReplyDelete
Thank you, Elgin. I'm afraid I have never read O. Henry's short stories — my loss.Delete
I also liked the way you included the book cover to lend an illustration to the story.Delete
Thanks again, Elgin. I tried it earlier with Mickey Spillane's MY GUN IS QUICK though my drabble did not reflect the cover. It's good for generating story ideas.Delete
Oh, Prashant, this is great! I do love that twist at the end, and I like the noir feel of your story. Beautifully done!ReplyDelete
Thank you, Margot. Glad you enjoyed it. A drabble is not easy because it can be written in so many ways. There were a few elements I wanted to put into this one. A hundred words is never enough.Delete
There is always a chair for rigor mortis to set in. Good one, Prashant.ReplyDelete
Thank you, Oscar. I wanted to try something different, not the usual cigarette dropping from his mouth and a dazed expression on his face. Well, rigor mortis is some exaggeration, I agree.Delete
I loved that ending, Prashant.ReplyDelete
Thank you, Tracy. I think the ending is the key in a drabble or 50-word dribble.Delete
Terrific stuff, Prashant. I never even knew that 'drabble' existed. Where have I been? I'm tempted to write something myself. Maybe we ought to have a 'drabble' challenge!ReplyDelete
Thank you, Yvette. I have been doing this for a while. My friend Margot Kinberg, who has hosted drabble challenges on her blog, introduced me to it a few years ago. It's good fun. I haven't tried the 50-word Dribble yet.Delete
I'd love to read what you come up with!
Aargh - great stuff and a killer ending. Nicely done Prashant, very creative.ReplyDelete
Thank you, Moira. It keeps me busy!Delete
Haha, you had me!ReplyDelete
I'm glad I did, Col. That's the idea!Delete