Tuesday, 19 January 2016

Drabble #2: A story in 100 words

I write my diary on the 7.56 pm local.

I look at the man nodding off on my left. He looks sixty. He is fat and bald. I can see that. He doesn't have hair on his head. He has a large nose and hair on his ears, like vertical eyelashes. He has an ugly mole on his chin.

I turn to look at him. He is staring at me. I jump. “Eeeks! You scared me!”

“Are you making fun of me?” he points at my phone.

“Uh...no...I wasn’t.”

“Biff!”

18 comments:

  1. This is well done, Prashant! It captures both characters, and packs a punch.

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    1. Thanks, Margot! I appreciate it. I post it on my Fb page for those who don't visit my blog and are new to the concept of Drabble. Thanks again for introducing me to it.

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  2. Nicely done, Prashant. Good word pictures.

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    1. Thanks, Elgin. The suburban train network is the lifeline of Bombay and most people spend a quarter of their lives commuting by the "local" trains. It's like a living sitcom.

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    1. Oscar, I enjoy d(r)abbling in it occasionally.

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  4. Very good picture drawn there Prashant.

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    1. Thanks, Moira. It's fun observing people in the local trains. The gentleman in question actually sat beside me, the rest is fiction.

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    1. Thanks, Tracy. Most of my drabbles are situational.

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  6. Entertaining - a real life occurrence?

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    1. Thanks, Col. Partly real — the gentleman, as described, sat next to me and I thought I'd weave a drabble around him.

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    1. Thanks, Charles. It's more like a situational Drabble.

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    1. Thanks, David. It helps to break the monotony.

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  9. Hopefully not based on a true event! Great fun Prashant!

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    1. Hi Sergio! Good to "see" you again. Well, not a true event, but the gent certainly was.

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