tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1169151311037688512.post6394997300693786182..comments2024-01-07T09:36:51.796-08:00Comments on Chess, Comics, Crosswords, Books, Music, Cinema: Innocent JusticePrashant C. Trikannadhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16079354501998741758noreply@blogger.comBlogger24125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1169151311037688512.post-58313693117495701362016-11-12T08:23:15.347-08:002016-11-12T08:23:15.347-08:00Thank you, Moira. That means a lot to me. I need t...Thank you, Moira. That means a lot to me. I need to introduce Indianness in my stories. Somehow that isn't coming through, perhaps because I'm far too influenced by Western settings and atmosphere.Prashant C. Trikannadhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16079354501998741758noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1169151311037688512.post-55626856687620279482016-11-11T14:51:12.992-08:002016-11-11T14:51:12.992-08:00The best of yours I've read Prashant - incredi...The best of yours I've read Prashant - incredible atmosphere, and details, and tension. I could picture it all. Really excellent.Clothes In Bookshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14680610242823846662noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1169151311037688512.post-25132316854891649272016-11-11T09:35:33.076-08:002016-11-11T09:35:33.076-08:00Thank you, Patti. I have been inspired by your own...Thank you, Patti. I have been inspired by your own short stories as well as those by our blog friends, Charles, Margot, David, Oscar, and many others.Prashant C. Trikannadhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16079354501998741758noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1169151311037688512.post-80246499967101325462016-11-11T09:30:19.673-08:002016-11-11T09:30:19.673-08:00Thank you, David. I feel like an explorer in the r...Thank you, David. I feel like an explorer in the realm of short stories, discovering something new as I go into uncharted territory.Prashant C. Trikannadhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16079354501998741758noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1169151311037688512.post-39863123671369596502016-11-11T07:02:49.838-08:002016-11-11T07:02:49.838-08:00Terrific, Prashant. Thanks for sharing. Terrific, Prashant. Thanks for sharing. pattinase (abbott)https://www.blogger.com/profile/02916037185235335846noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1169151311037688512.post-14908504832450402212016-11-10T11:43:51.009-08:002016-11-10T11:43:51.009-08:00I'm with Charles. Like the details.I'm with Charles. Like the details. David Cranmerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04749857752139212888noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1169151311037688512.post-12695120040100949012016-11-09T19:16:23.072-08:002016-11-09T19:16:23.072-08:00Thanks, Oscar. I feel encouraged; of course, to do...Thanks, Oscar. I feel encouraged; of course, to do better in my future stories.Prashant C. Trikannadhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16079354501998741758noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1169151311037688512.post-48973312165415292362016-11-09T13:05:48.619-08:002016-11-09T13:05:48.619-08:00Endings are tough,but you did fine on this one.Endings are tough,but you did fine on this one.Oscar Casehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10328166606910469945noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1169151311037688512.post-30198832950978999922016-11-07T19:27:27.514-08:002016-11-07T19:27:27.514-08:00Thank you, Oscar. I'm happy you liked it. The ...Thank you, Oscar. I'm happy you liked it. The twist is in the tail — how do I end it? — which, for me, is the hardest part of writing a story.Prashant C. Trikannadhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16079354501998741758noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1169151311037688512.post-90916577775559899542016-11-07T09:56:18.375-08:002016-11-07T09:56:18.375-08:00Terrific story, Prashant and a nice twist at the e...Terrific story, Prashant and a nice twist at the end.Oscar Casehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10328166606910469945noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1169151311037688512.post-58498750346235018012016-11-07T08:10:11.889-08:002016-11-07T08:10:11.889-08:00Thank you, Charles. I appreciate your positive fee...Thank you, Charles. I appreciate your positive feedback. Next I want to try my hand at fantasy or science fiction. But first I'll have to oil my imagination really well, and then the writing, of course.Prashant C. Trikannadhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16079354501998741758noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1169151311037688512.post-86071205442453991972016-11-07T07:57:29.048-08:002016-11-07T07:57:29.048-08:00Three big scores for me — thank you, Col! The prob...Three big scores for me — thank you, Col! The problem with flash fiction or short story are ruing over elements that don't go into the story because there isn't enough space. Everything seems important.Prashant C. Trikannadhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16079354501998741758noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1169151311037688512.post-51069521878996035172016-11-07T06:20:41.489-08:002016-11-07T06:20:41.489-08:00Wow, this is really good. excellent details. I cou...Wow, this is really good. excellent details. I could feel it all.Charles Gramlichhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02052592247572253641noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1169151311037688512.post-64819859929574184102016-11-07T03:55:55.809-08:002016-11-07T03:55:55.809-08:00Top story, Prashant - well done! Great atmosphere ...Top story, Prashant - well done! Great atmosphere to it.col2910https://www.blogger.com/profile/06422138069939709043noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1169151311037688512.post-90053249977548046872016-11-06T20:34:42.869-08:002016-11-06T20:34:42.869-08:00Thank you, Margot. As I noted in my reply to Mysti...Thank you, Margot. As I noted in my reply to Mystica's comment, I struggled with the ending, and frankly, I'm still not happy with it. I'd love to know how published writers, like you Margot, would've ended it. The boy sets out to kill his stepfather and is suddenly confronted by the horror of seeing his mother do the deed, and he can't accept it. It is not easy to draw human emotion, especially children's.Prashant C. Trikannadhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16079354501998741758noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1169151311037688512.post-66989434988932697412016-11-06T20:13:00.995-08:002016-11-06T20:13:00.995-08:00Thank you, Elgin. I appreciate your feedback. Impr...Thank you, Elgin. I appreciate your feedback. Improbabilities in a story bother me. For instance, can a ten-year-old actually be in this situation? From what I have heard people tell, he can. The next questions is how best to capture it. Well, one writes and learns.Prashant C. Trikannadhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16079354501998741758noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1169151311037688512.post-40376773665761263362016-11-06T20:00:16.679-08:002016-11-06T20:00:16.679-08:00Thank you, Tracy. A story can be written and rewri...Thank you, Tracy. A story can be written and rewritten in a hundred and more ways, and that's my dilemma.Prashant C. Trikannadhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16079354501998741758noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1169151311037688512.post-17417383183251246222016-11-06T19:22:31.271-08:002016-11-06T19:22:31.271-08:00What a powerful story, Prashant! You really convey...What a powerful story, Prashant! You really convey the boy's feelings effectively, and I like his sense of protectiveness about his mother. Even the small part of the shopkeeper is done well. I'm impressed with your use of atmosphere, too. I really felt the boy's mix of fear and hatred and determination. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1169151311037688512.post-34455748721305368152016-11-06T18:42:41.542-08:002016-11-06T18:42:41.542-08:00Very nice work, Prashant. The child’s rising anger...Very nice work, Prashant. The child’s rising anger was well done. The storm, the lightning, and the rain and running water were vivid.Elgin Bleeckerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08417587392887691664noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1169151311037688512.post-923312415421826002016-11-06T14:47:26.810-08:002016-11-06T14:47:26.810-08:00Very good story, Prashant. With a terrifying endin...Very good story, Prashant. With a terrifying ending.TracyKhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08303342674824383688noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1169151311037688512.post-58958759629933181982016-11-06T00:02:04.034-07:002016-11-06T00:02:04.034-07:00Thank you, Neer. Part of that came from my own exp...Thank you, Neer. Part of that came from my own experience walking through the flooded streets of Bombay, on my way to school and back. Of course, my circumstances were entirely different, and certainly happier than Kiaan's.Prashant C. Trikannadhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16079354501998741758noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1169151311037688512.post-69263460085244919852016-11-05T23:59:11.675-07:002016-11-05T23:59:11.675-07:00Thank you, Mystica. I spent days pondering over th...Thank you, Mystica. I spent days pondering over the ending, which was predictable any which way I thought about it. In the end I decided to add a little twist.Prashant C. Trikannadhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16079354501998741758noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1169151311037688512.post-13429581938942142962016-11-05T23:18:10.114-07:002016-11-05T23:18:10.114-07:00Powerful, Prashant. That creepy, crawly thing goin...Powerful, Prashant. That creepy, crawly thing going up and down his leg. Ugh. And the setting reminded me of those abandoned mills of Mumbai.<br />neerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01986509319841061021noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1169151311037688512.post-79052478466725499032016-11-05T22:28:32.438-07:002016-11-05T22:28:32.438-07:00Liked the story very much! I thought it was going ...Liked the story very much! I thought it was going to end in another way though!Mysticahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10941269615559681014noreply@blogger.com